What's on your mind today?

[Tank]

Good question... Too early for that yet, but I'll have to find someone.

Paging Cecilie and Guardian85, paging Cecilie and Guardian85!!

[Asmodean]

Would have to be a native English speaker to do it properly, I think, even though those two do can speak English.

[Tank]

Would have to be a native English speaker to do it properly, I think, even though those two do can speak English.

Well that rules out TMP as he's 'stralian.

[Asmodean]

Actually, that's probably close enough... As long as my characters don't have to fake Aussie accents - those just don't convey doom and gloom well enough  

[The Magic Pudding]

Well that rules out TMP as he's 'stralian.

Thanks mate, you'll keep.

[Tank]

Well that rules out TMP as he's 'stralian.

Thanks mate, you'll keep.

[Sweetdeath]

Tummy ache ;_;

[Asmodean]

Hmm... My overly shy vocalist decided to give a song I've long wanted to cover a try, even though it is in a fictional language

[Sweetdeath]

Hmm... My overly shy vocalist decided to give a song I've long wanted to cover a try, even though it is in a fictional language

Oooh, Elvish?

[Asmodean]

Hmm... My overly shy vocalist decided to give a song I've long wanted to cover a try, even though it is in a fictional language

Oooh, Elvish?

Fremen.

Now, if I could convince him to do the Skyrim theme too, even though his voice is far too melodic...

[Ali]

Thoughts and images, like raindrops falling against the windshield... Some being whisked away, others - just falling apart before they manage to coalesce into streams, to form the intricate patterns, that web of memory I think my mind once held.

There is only here and now. Only the sound of rain, tires screeching through another bend on this endless road and a pool of yellowish light, seen through the fog of perspiration and cigarette smoke. No matter how long I chase it, I know it will always stay ahead.

This is how my story ends... Or was it how it all began? Seven days. Yes, I think that's how long it has been since my world turned inside out all around me, and all those once-impenetrable walls surrounding me crumbled, tumbling down in an avalanche of dust and failed aspirations and all that shit I never let touch me.

Thoughts and images... Like shards of a thousand mirrors, all shattered - all but one. Julie. There were others too, other faces, different names, different stories, but it all started with her.
/...

I like it.  I like the driving metaphors mixed in with actual driving. Painted a very clear picture in my mind of dark roads and smoke and a bit of desperation.

I agree with Tank that an English speaker would read "Julie" and hear "Ju-lie" although I don't necessarily agree that a normal name is a bad thing.  I hate it when people use names that sound so obviously made up in stories.  It's cheesy.  Julie isn't cheesy, it's just a normal every day name.

[Tank]

Tummy ache ;_;

[Asmodean]

Thanks for the feedback!

Julie isn't cheesy, it's just a normal every day name.

That was the intention. She is not supposed to stand out even while she does.

[Sweetdeath]

Tummy ache ;_;

[Ali]

Sweet D, I hope you feel better.  You've been having a bit of tummy troubles lately haven't you?