Need Your Guys' Opinion on my Paper for English

[Godless]

I had to write about a "critical situation," which is pretty much a situation I have a stake in. I have to address it from as many angles as possible and have to present the specifics of the topic. I decided to write about Atheism in America. I'll be honest, I'm not a very good writer at all and English is probably my worst subject. But I could still use some feedback from you guys on my paper. It's pretty long so you could just skim it or read parts of it. The numbers in the paper are for the endnotes which are at the bottom.

*might repost my paper later - see post below for why*

[iNow]

I'm usually a rather harsh critic of the writings put forth by other people, but overall this is a very solid piece.  Quite well done.  I have no idea how your teacher will react, nor any idea of how well it fits into the assignment, but you've done a great job hitting all of the major areas.  Only one thing I would add... In your paragraph about stem cells... You can drive that point home a bit more by suggesting that their beliefs are contradictory and internally inconsistent... That apparently life itself is so sacred that murder is okay.  It just doesn't make sense, and might be worth pointing out.  Alternatively, you could mention how many people like juvenile diabetics are going to die because they'd rather protect stem cells than people.  

Either way, though... Nice paper.  I hope you score a good grade on it.  The amount of thought and consideration you put into it is plainly obvious, and I enjoyed reading it.  Thank you for sharing.

[Godless]

Thank you. Do you think it sounds too one sided though? Because I'm not supposed to necessarily provide an argument/information solely from the atheist stance.

[Will]

I can't really speak to grammar and syntax as I made a point of forgetting everything I've ever learned in an english class out of spite, but the topic and your exploration seem quite good.

[Whitney]

I'll read it later tonight when I get home from work.

I can't really speak to grammar and syntax as I made a point of forgetting everything I've ever learned in an english class out of spite,

That's like me with French.

[Reginus]

Heh trying to learn a new language is like mentally slitting your wrists.

[Renegnicat]

Es ist wie geistig Schlitzen meine Handgelenke? Nein! Es ist wie immer ein mit einem leistungsstarken Viking!

[nikkmichalski]

I had to write about a "critical situation," which is pretty much a situation I have a stake in. I have to address it from as many angles as possible and have to present the specifics of the topic. I decided to write about Atheism in America. I'll be honest, I'm not a very good writer at all and English is probably my worst subject. But I could still use some feedback from you guys on my paper. It's pretty long so you could just skim it or read parts of it. The numbers in the paper are for the endnotes which are at the bottom.

Atheism in America
 
etc...
         

I would be careful if you use TurnItIn.org. It'll come up as 100% plagiarized!

[Godless]

I had to write about a "critical situation," which is pretty much a situation I have a stake in. I have to address it from as many angles as possible and have to present the specifics of the topic. I decided to write about Atheism in America. I'll be honest, I'm not a very good writer at all and English is probably my worst subject. But I could still use some feedback from you guys on my paper. It's pretty long so you could just skim it or read parts of it. The numbers in the paper are for the endnotes which are at the bottom.

Atheism in America
 
etc...
         

I would be careful if you use TurnItIn.org. It'll come up as 100% plagiarized!

Actually good point... I'm gonna remove it for now because I already turned it in. I'll put it back up if my teacher offers me the option of a rewrite if I don't get a good grade.

[nikkmichalski]

Es ist wie geistig Schlitzen meine Handgelenke? Nein! Es ist wie immer ein mit einem leistungsstarken Viking!

Damn me and my poor memory for German. All I know are "Entschuldigen Sie" and Industrial Metal lyrics.

[Godless]

I got my paper back yesterday and I got an A! I didn't think my teacher was gonna like it that much but I guess I underestimate myself too much sometimes.

[MommaSquid]

Need Your Guys' Opinion on my Paper for English

Grammatical error in the title of a thread regarding an English paper...does anyone else find this humorously ironic?  

[nikkmichalski]

Need Your Guys' Opinion on my Paper for English

Grammatical error in the title of a thread regarding an English paper...does anyone else find this humorously ironic?  

I believe that sentence is grammatically correct.

"Need Your Guys''"

It's plural possessive. Plural means "s", and possessive means apostrophe AFTER the "s" (when plural).

And Godless: Congrats on the "A"!

[AlP]

Need Your Guys' Opinion on my Paper for English

Grammatical error in the title of a thread regarding an English paper...does anyone else find this humorously ironic?  

I believe that sentence is grammatically correct.

"Need Your Guys''"

It's plural possessive. Plural means "s", and possessive means apostrophe AFTER the "s" (when plural).

And Godless: Congrats on the "A"!

I think it should be:
Need You Guys'
=)

[nikkmichalski]

Hmmm...maybe it should. I'm not sure. We need an English Teacher to intervene here!