Transience: an Atheist/Christian Romance

[Whitney]

Why in the world would you think atheists would want to read about some hitchhiking atheist who's life was saved from spiraling out of control by an angelic christian girl?  The plot doesn't make any sense if your target audience is simply atheists....it would make a lot of sense if this book is an evangelical novel.

Maybe people would want to read your story if you had bothered to involve yourself in the community before trying to sell your wares....but just using the forum as an advertising billboard doesn't tend to win over the membership.

[Renegnicat]

Whitney, you just earned yourself a vodka.  

[Ihateyoumike]

Hullo, my name is Christine

Hello Christine. Welcome to the forum.

First, though a Christian, discussing other religions interests me,

I apologize if I'm wrong here, but this says to me that you think atheism is a religion. That throws up a big red flag to me, as I'm sure it does other atheists. Atheism is not a religion. I hope you understand that.

Secondly, I'm trying to find readers for my new Christian/atheist romance book based on the early stages of our relationship.

I appreciate you honesty in stating that you are here to attempt to make money and sell us something. However, as others here have stated, it would certainly endear you more to the board if you were to spend some time getting involved here before you try to sell us something. As it stands, I took your post to be merely spam. I'm sorry if that hurts your feelings, but it is the truth.

Wow, so, I might post here more if you all weren't so harsh.

As a person who has frequented this board for close to a year now, I have already seen all types of theists attempting to come here and change our minds in multiple (often disguised and dishonest) ways. Forgive the members of this board for being skeptical, but firstly it's in our natures, and secondly it's very much not helped by your theist cohorts.

I can't imagine how annoying this must be for my fellow members who have been here for much longer than I.

 

Didn't know my posts had to be perfect for you to be interested in my book.

They don't. However, as has been pointed out, why would someone want to read a book by someone who doesn't have a very readable method of writing. I'll take your word that the book is edited well, but your style of writing on the board is not something that makes me think I would like to read your book.

Also, your plot summary simply does not intrigue me. I'm sorry, but this is constructive criticism. Please take it for what it is.

Gee, and I call my bf critical, at least he's nice. Thanks to those who offered CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, as some weren't so harsh.

I'm attempting to not come across as harsh, however if that's the way you choose to take it, that's fine by me. If you choose to stay active on this forum you will find that most of the members will be honest with their viewpoints. Please avoid taking the wounded dog approach and seeing constructive criticism as something that it is not. Yes, you are a theist on an atheist board. But remember, it is you who have chosen to "expose" yourself to us and not the other way around.

On this note, I'd be happy to send anyone a free Ebook version of the book if they feel like it.

No thank you. Nothing personal, it does not seem to be something I would be interested in.

That being said, I again welcome you to the board. Should you choose to stick around, I look forward to having you be a part of this community.  

[Ellainix]

On this note, I'd be happy to send anyone a free Ebook version of the book if they feel like it. And to the person who said the book wouldn't even make sense, please don't judge before you read. Thanks, have a great day!

I am actually interested in this offer. I promise to post an Amazon review when I am finished. I have a thing for angels and angelic imagery.

[Whitney]

On this note, I'd be happy to send anyone a free Ebook version of the book if they feel like it. And to the person who said the book wouldn't even make sense, please don't judge before you read. Thanks, have a great day!

I am actually interested in this offer. I promise to post an Amazon review when I am finished. I have a thing for angels and angelic imagery.

I have a feeling I probably scared the author away since she doesn't like "harsh" and I felt justified being harsh in this case...you probably will have to try to email her for the ebook.

[Kylyssa]

Wow, so, I might post here more if you all weren't so harsh. Didn't know my posts had to be perfect for you to be interested in my book. I know how to write and have recently learned alot about editting. It takes alot of time, and with all the writing I do, I don't have time to sit here and read every single line and edit it to publishers' standards. Gee, and I call my bf critical, at least he's nice. Thanks to those who offered CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, as some weren't so harsh. On this note, I'd be happy to send anyone a free Ebook version of the book if they feel like it. And to the person who said the book wouldn't even make sense, please don't judge before you read. Thanks, have a great day!

I'd strongly suggest that you post edited versions of the sample pages provided on Amazon.  If you have an edited version of each of your novels, why not provide the samples from them instead of from the drafts?  While most readers aren't too hung up on grammar, a sample full of grammatical errors really isn't going to help sales.  If you hired an editor, get your money's worth by posting the edited versions as samples on Amazon.

Critiquing you IS being nice.  Would you rather have people pretend that what you are presenting is up to par or would you rather get the feedback you need to put out a quality product that more people will buy?

I'd suggest writing different advertisements, each suited to the bulletin boards you post your links on.  For instance, try to take a different tone to suit the audience.  Also, as others have mentioned, when your first posts are advertisements, it's a turnoff.

When people critique my writing, I am thankful.  They are saving me from further embarrassment.

[Kylyssa]

To help keep spelling errors to a minimum when you post to forums, you can use your browser to auto-check your spelling as you type, costing you no additional effort.  On FireFox, go to the 'Tools' button on the top of the tool bar.  Click on it, then scroll down to 'Options' and click on it.  A box will pop up with multiple tabs in it.  Click on the tab that says 'General' and click on the check box beside 'Check my spelling as I type' then click on the 'OK' button at the bottom of the pop-up box.  Now your browser is set to check your spelling almost anywhere you type online!

It won't help your grammar but at least it's one step toward a more professional presentation.

[joeactor]

Hi Christine,

Welcome.

You might try to look at your entrance to the forum here in a different light.

Let's say you're at a party with some friends.  It's been going on for a little while when a new person comes in and says "Hi.  I'm selling something - anyone want to buy?".  Think about how you might react to that.

Forums are little communities.  It's best to come in, introduce yourself, post a bit - you know... meet the neighbors.

Although the advice may or may not be harsh, it was constructive.  There are things you can do to improve the points mentioned...

In any case, if you read this, you are welcome to contribute here.

Nice to meet you,
JoeActor

p.s. like writers, actors need a thick skin.  criticism and rejection are part of the buisness...