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Re: Haiku Thread

Started by jumbojak, December 28, 2014, 04:25:46 AM

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jumbojak

Sokka's Haiku Battle I loved The Avatar cartoon.

My submission:

The hound is here now
Greedily chewing his bone
Not to be disturbed

"Amazing what chimney sweeping can teach us, no? Keep your fire hot and
your flue clean."  - Ecurb Noselrub

"I'd be incensed by your impudence were I not so impressed by your memory." - Siz

jumbojak

How to the salt mine
for me to them directly
then we have nothing

My phone spit that one out. Weird.

"Amazing what chimney sweeping can teach us, no? Keep your fire hot and
your flue clean."  - Ecurb Noselrub

"I'd be incensed by your impudence were I not so impressed by your memory." - Siz

Recusant

Quote from: jumbojak on December 28, 2014, 04:37:07 AM
How to the salt mine
for me to them directly
then we have nothing

My phone spit that one out. Weird.


I think your haiku was rather good. This one is more of a senryū, in my opinion.
"Religion is fundamentally opposed to everything I hold in veneration — courage, clear thinking, honesty, fairness, and above all, love of the truth."
— H. L. Mencken


OldGit

First a random five
Scrape the barrel for seven
Then dig up five more.

Jeez, but it's boring.  Nearly as mind-numbing as tennis.

jumbojak

Quote from: Recusant on December 28, 2014, 04:39:59 AMThis one is more of a senryū, in my opinion.

Interesting. I'd never heard of a senryu before.

Morbid haiku box
In my pocket it sits now
Yet it gets it wrong

"Amazing what chimney sweeping can teach us, no? Keep your fire hot and
your flue clean."  - Ecurb Noselrub

"I'd be incensed by your impudence were I not so impressed by your memory." - Siz

jumbojak

Quote from: OldGit on December 28, 2014, 10:10:36 AMJeez, but it's boring.  Nearly as mind-numbing as tennis.

I don't know about that OG. Having played tennis for many years I can't think of anything more stultifying!

Hit the ball across
Watch it sail over the net
Rinse lather repeat

"Amazing what chimney sweeping can teach us, no? Keep your fire hot and
your flue clean."  - Ecurb Noselrub

"I'd be incensed by your impudence were I not so impressed by your memory." - Siz

xSilverPhinx

I'll give it a try.

Spammers register
They won't get through on my watch
Bring me the hammer
I am what survives if it's slain - Zack Hemsey


jumbojak

Sneakers change their name
To hock their shit every day
Fernanda never plays

"Amazing what chimney sweeping can teach us, no? Keep your fire hot and
your flue clean."  - Ecurb Noselrub

"I'd be incensed by your impudence were I not so impressed by your memory." - Siz

Asmodean

The Asmo, He has the perfect haiku in His siggie.

Quote from: Ecurb Noselrub on July 25, 2013, 08:18:52 PM
In Asmo's grey lump,
wrath and dark clouds gather force.
Luxembourg trembles.

Michael1

#9
I have no future
And whilst I love the present
It is passing now

maybe this is better:

I have no future
And whilst I love the present
It just passes by
I liked the earth before it was cool.

xSilverPhinx

Jumbojak is right
I think I like haiku now
Insert good line here
I am what survives if it's slain - Zack Hemsey


jumbojak

Insert a line why
One's thought belongs to them only
Your eye is your own

"Amazing what chimney sweeping can teach us, no? Keep your fire hot and
your flue clean."  - Ecurb Noselrub

"I'd be incensed by your impudence were I not so impressed by your memory." - Siz

xSilverPhinx

A good line, a rhyme
I'm not the creative type
When I broadcast thoughts
I am what survives if it's slain - Zack Hemsey


OldGit

Edward II
Had a red-hot poker shoved
Up his you-know-where.

xSilverPhinx

Some roses are red
Whereas violets are blue
I don't like flowers.
I am what survives if it's slain - Zack Hemsey