Original Music and AI Experimentations

[NoraCola]

Is this too Self Promoting? Idk. I don't get paid anything for it, I just made it for fun. Anyway, I wrote these lyrics and mangled the spelling in an attempt to get the right accent out of ai because I'm not that strong a singer, let alone an arranger of emotional string sections and I don't like the Disney princess voice it usually gives me: Keep That Mess

Hopefully I'll get around to making a video soon.

[Asmodean]

Taken for what it is, it's good.

Prima facie, The lyrics come across a bit "center-of-your-universe-y," but then one cannot precisely put three pages of context into a three minute song. I guess I'd just have approached it from a different angle.

Stronger/more prominent flow switch/crescendo would be satisfying too, I think.

That said, however, don't let a nay-saying The Asmo back-seat-music for you. Overall, my impression was positive.

[NoraCola]

Stronger/more prominent flow switch/crescendo would be satisfying too, I think.

That's a good critique actually. I probably should have emphasized that the music is ai generated and I only wrote the lyrics. I have every intention to create fully live/studio versions of all my ai songs, it just takes a lot more time. But until then, I only have so much control over the way this ai interprets prompts and this version already took around a dozen tries, just to produce something I like - even as a rough sketch.

As for the lyrics themselves, yeah. It's not an intellectual kind of song. It's just a collection of the kind of thoughts that go through my head whenever someone tries to induce me to believe in absolute rubbish. I'm essentially telling them there is no possible incentive for me to even listen to their pitch, so don't even try. The way it escalates into an emotional outpouring just makes it even funnier to me. It's a work of comedy more than anything.

[Asmodean]

I do try to be constructive, approaching my critique from the angle of "what would it take for it to be added to my driving playlist?"

A song does not need to be an intellectual exercise, though I personally may appreciate such. My point was more towards that what I think I would have tried to do here, was get my point across by telling a story rather than "talking at" the listener. It's... Comfortably Numb vs. We are the World. One comes at you with its nose at a completely different angle in the air than the other. It's... Not easy to word properly, at least for a The Asmo with the emotional IQ of a lump of clay, but it's there. Both styles do can produce good songs though. Some times you just gotta'... Tell a bitch to get out the way. (Ludacris reference, for those not hip-hoppingly inclined)

[NoraCola]

what I think I would have tried to do here, was get my point across by telling a story rather than "talking at" the listener.

I thought more about this while I was preparing to write something new in the same style and realized it doesn't really fit the style. It's not necessarily satirical but in a sense it's a style parody of church songs. One thing about the church songs I grew up with: they're preachy. Talking at the listener was definitely part of the point of the song.


All that said, musical critique isn't the intended topic of this thread. I asked if anyone else had created anything original they'd like to share. 

[Recusant]

I don't have anything to present, but I liked your song, NoraCola!

[NoraCola]

I don't have anything to present, but I liked your song, NoraCola!

Thank you!

[Asmodean]

All that said, musical critique isn't the intended topic of this thread. I asked if anyone else had created anything original they'd like to share. 

Well... The Asmo used to be in a band and wrote a couple of pieces of lyrics, though it's been a decade-or-so. I'll see if I can find something worth sharing.

As for your comment about the lyrical style, yes, it does make sense. When making an "anti-anthem," you may want to preserve the original "feel" of it as you see it.